Just a Point Along a Line

PHOTO PROMPT © Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

“The sunshine defined us then,” Reg remembered, “But it’s not funeral weather, somehow.”
His shadow cast a twisted figure on the wall. Fleetingly he glimpsed the bullish version of his former self.
He pressed both gnarled hands on his cane, suddenly needing support.
“Well you’re at peace now, Maria.”
His bowed head shrouded tears falling and instantly evaporating on the cobbles.
“Nothing in the grand scheme of things, just a point along an everlasting line, but we were everything then.”
“Are you alright senhor?” A young woman had appeared beside him.
He smiled, “Thank-you, I will be in a minute.”

Written for Friday Fictioneers – a 100 words story based on a photo prompt. Hosted by Rochelle. Read the other entries here.

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63 thoughts on “Just a Point Along a Line

  1. This brought a tear. Nicely done. It reminds me of when we took my dad to the funeral home to say a private goodbye to our mother and he said, “Goodbye, Rita. You take care of heaven and we’ll take care of the earth.”

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    • Thank-you, it’s obviously very rewarding for me to hear you say that. Your father’s love for and tribute to your mother was the very thing I was trying to show, I’m pleased it reminded you of that moment

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  2. It’s terribly sad that we lose some people even before they are lost.
    Brilliant writing, Michael and so touching .
    “His bowed head shrouded tears falling and instantly evaporating on the cobbles.”, loved this expression, among others .

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    • Thank-you for identifying that, it was the concept I was trying to explore. In our lives there are things hugely important to us which are huge to us and despite them having no import to the rest of the world, it doesn’t matter, the important thing is to have those moments, to live.

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  3. Very poignant. Makes you really feel for the protagonist and the love he shared with his Maria. And a beautiful line to emphasize it in ‘Nothing in the grand scheme of things, just a point along an everlasting line, but we were everything then.’
    A beautiful piece. Glad, I stumbled across it through Friday Fictioneers.

    Cheers, Varad

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  4. Nicely done. I like the way you incorporated time through characters of different ages. I look forward to you participating in my challenge. Feel free to pass the word along. 🙂

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  5. It’s always hard to lose someone you’ve spent a good part of your life with. Sometimes I expect my husband to complain the TV is too loud or something similar. I’m fortunate the lady who cared for him stayed on to help me so I’m not alone. Good writing, Michael. —- Suzanne

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